Need Constructive Criticism

posted 2004 by Brian Clark

OK i have been working on a few aphorisms and so far i have written 3.. I need your advice if they are aphorisms and if they are if you think they are any good..

1. When a man knows everything his lips are sewn together.

2. When failure is used as a tool, perfection will be achieved.

3. Humility is the price we pay for our irrepressible and drunken verdicts..

Thanks,,Brian Clark

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